Proofread. Especially if you write things for wide publication.

[kyrielle]

Robert Tools received a self-contained artificial heart in a clinical trial; he was the first recipient. He had not very long to live, probably; and they said at the time they believed the trial would be a success if he lived 60 days, instead of the expected time. He lived almost six months, dying today.

And the person/people who wrote the article about it got their statements mixed up pathetically.

For example:

Robert Tools, the world's first recipient of a self-contained artificial heart,...

Then, near the bottom of the article, they add:

Tools was the sixth person to receive the artificial heart.

Geesh. I know there were six trials approved, but he was the first, guys. The story fascinated me at the time, so at least I know which one of these sentences is right.

And this sentence should be taken out and shot, for fairly obvious reasons:

Tools was first introduced to the media back in July, more than a month after receiving the transplant in August.

Comments

[asciident]

Hahahahahaha!

That writer should really consider a career change. ;P

[kyrielle]

Probably, so should whoever was editor on that piece. Aie!

[dormouse-in-tea.livejournal.com]

"More than a month after....."

*snickers*

[kyrielle]

*M&Ms*

Oh, wait....